This kicks off the in-house critique session I’m hosting. There are a few places left. If you’re interested, see here for details.
Title: Trinity Coven
Genre: Contemporary Fantasy
First 250 words:
The black Labrador squirmed in Kaelin’s arms as she wrestled it into the filled tub. Jep consistently fought bathtime. She finally got him in and reached for the shampoo, one arm holding Jep still. She worked the suds into his fur, working up a nice lather when the office phone rang.
“Miley? Can you get that?”
The shelter owner didn’t answer. The phone rang on regardless. “James? Anyone else here?” They must have left for lunch already. Kaelin groaned. Maybe if she took her time washing the dog, the caller would try again another time. Five rings, six, seven. Jep was well rinsed off and tensed to escape at the first sign of weakness. Kaelin released him in defeat and he leapt out of the tub. “Don’t go too far. You still need a good dry and a brushing.”
Ten rings and still going. She dried her hands on a towel, then threw it on Jep’s back. The lab shook himself, dislodging the towel and spraying water. Kaelin ducked around the corner to grab the phone. She returned to retrieve the towel and kneel by Jep, now gnawing on a rubber bone. She answered the phone on the twelfth ring, tucking it between her ear and shoulder.
“Animal Haven. How can I help you?” She ran the towel over the dog.
A young male voice answered. “Is Kaelin Fontaine available?”
“That would be me.”
“My name is Blake Wyndham. I was notified recently of your parents passing. I’m sorry.”
Readers: Would you read on? Why or why not? What did you like? What didn’t you like? What could be changed?